Drugs close to the value of £50.000 has been seized following a fatal crash in Moonville last night.
An accident involving a police car and another vehicle has left one man dead and a policeman seriously injured.
PC Rodgers, who is in a comfortable condition, was on a 999 call when the incident occurred at the junction of Scar Road and the High Street.
A rucksack, found in the Golf, containing both cannabis and cocaine which had a street value of £30.000 and £17,000 respectively has been taken away by the drugs squad.
The VW, is thought to have gone out of control when it saw the police car. Detective Chief Superintendent Angelica Stripes said, “It looks as if the driver, who was carrying a substantial amount of drugs in his car, may have panicked when he saw the blue light.”
The police car crashed into a monument and the other car hit the front of the video shop.
Two police cars and two ambulances attended the incident. Pc Rodgers was taken to St Monty’s Hospital and was treated for concussion, and a fracture to the nose and leg.
The driver of the Golf, also taken hospital was certified dead on arrival, a post mortem is being carried out but the identity of the driver has yet to be established.
PC Rodgers has been suspended on full pay, which is normal procedure when a police vehicle is involved. An internal inquiry has been launched.
The traffic was diverted for two hours following the incident, and a police helicopter was used to search for the passenger of the car who was seen running from the scene before emergency services arrived.
The man has been described as slim, short and around five feet tall with a pale complexion and dark spikey hair. He was wearing red converse shoes, skinny jeans and a brown leather bomber jacket.
“We would like members of the public to come forward if they have seen the man. We suspect that he is local and perhaps known to drug users in the area,” added DCS Stripes
The police hotline for this incident is Moonville 212121.
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running story/for paper and for web. I thought keeping to the short word count for the online addition would be harder, but it wasnt to bad after cutting out a few words. I find myself looking for ways to cut out words now so its great grounding for tightening my copy. I also look for ways to make opening paras more punchy (such as adding the figures together for the amount of drugs) and I hope I am getting to grips with this alittle more now. I am getting a bit quicker to which is rather good!
Hi Ellie - I like the way you are reflecting on your own work, by the way...
This story was mostly OK structurally, but for some reason you're a bit sloppy in parts. It reads in quite a staccato fashiopn - not much flow there. For example, you start by talking about the drug seizure, then immediately start talking about a car crash which initially seems like it's not linked.
I am in a picky mood, so I'd also highlight your incorrect use of 'has' in the first line - should either be 'A quantity of drugs has' or drugs have' (the latter is shorter and therefore preferable).
You also start talking about a Golf, then a VW when it's not initally made clear that this is the non-police car. Small points I know, but essential!
Otherwise good and entertaining too.
jc
GOod story, but just a few pointers; your use of has instead of have in the first sentence mixes tenses a bit.
Also maybe you could've said said 'The accident' instead of 'An accident' to link the first two para's more closely.
Perhaps youy could have left PC Rodgers condition until a bit later on in the piece.
You probably could have lost the word 'both' in para 4.
If youy split the next para it helps the flow of the piece as it's quite a long para compared to the rest of the piece.
PC, your capitalsation of these two letters is not consistent.
I know that it sounds really picky, but you have several sentences starting with 'The' towards the end of the piece; it kind of seems to be a little repetitious or a string of statements.
The only other thing that I would say is that you could have brought in a quote from the witness and got across the location of the accident, killing two birds with one stone..in the mnument/video shop para.
Good stutff though, you have managed to get loads of information in whilst sticking tightly to the word count.
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